Here's what I'll send in...
Acting: Some personalities were more believable than others, and some seemed to be stuttering before saying the right words. I know most people don't talk very fluently but this seemed a little overdone, almost too improvised.
Fit: All voices were done well, and they fit their corresponding characters with almost stereotypical precision... in a good way though.
Originality: Even though it was an overused subject, the addictions were very unique, and it is quite entertaining to visualize these people's addictions.
Range: All characters have their own distinction, and it was pulled off quite nicely. I think two characters sounded a little too similar, but since the dialogue is so rapid-fire it's not too noticeable.
Mixing: (at first) There's nice background chatter, and the music fit nicely... I could hardly spot any pops or hard letters, and the volume was very even throughout the- (suddenly) FFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUCCKKK!!?! Take that goddamn cricket chirp out... I think my ears are bleeding!
I'm thinking your strong points were in the "Fit" & "Originality" categories.
I really dug the improv style of humor even though some lines were over-the-top, it still adds to the presentation.
Thanks very much for the great review! A lot of people have been telling me about that cricket thing. It didn't seem that loud for me so I'm not sure what happened. haha.
The improv was a lot of fun, but I might try a script next time and see how it goes.
Thanks again! Can't wait to see the final results!
Acting: stoner and narrator were believable, the main character seemed really calm for his situation, but for the most part the characters played their parts respectively.
Fit: I can't really believe the news anchor, and the main character is too quiet at times when it seemed like you were trying to yell... really belt it out there to give it some passion man!
Originality: this escalates into a bit of a clusterfuck of events, and you really don't see some of them coming!
Range: you can definitely tell them apart, this was one of your strongest points
Mixing: there's some heavy breathing issues, and some portions need the volume to be tweaked
To be honest, it was really hard to pay attention the ENTIRE 8 minutes. After a couple of listens, it kinda grew on me... I keep finding little quotables, and funny wordplay such as "It's whatever" or "ROBOT JESUS" I enjoyed those touches.
If you were going for the ENTIRE 8 minutes then it should be a story that really draws you in, this really could be cut down to about 4 minutes if you cut down some filler.
A pez addiction is new! and I liked how this ended, even though it seemed to drag on.
Thank you very much- I'll definitely work on all of that.
I'm glad to hear that Range is one of my strong point's, because as I figure it's the base point for VAing- and as for volume and mixing that's something I'll just have to work on.
With the story it'self- I should have taken much more time with it- and that's fully on me.
Thank you much for the review, I'll use this to work on developing my VAing from this point on. Much appreciated ^_^
This is what I will send in...
Acting: Most lines were believable, as their characters' voices sounded like themselves, even though some of them went slightly out of character.
Fit: Yep... they fit well.
Originality: Kinda lacking, I think you could've created your own characters and it would still mostly have the same humor.
Range: Done with ease, there was only one or two times I could tell they were the same person.
Mixing: Very clear, and has very audibly pleasing sound effects at the right moments, except the part where Mario kills Heavy... that part seemed like it was cut sloppily.
The humor here is definitely one of your strong points, and most of the impressions were... well... impressive!
The thing about impressions is that IF you can pull them off well, it makes the "fit" portion kinda a breeze, but what this takes away from is the originality, all it takes is putting characters from popular games/shows, and placing them in different situations.
Your interpretations of these characters' actions are entertaining, and it was easy to listen to multiple times. I could easily envision all these characters "acting" in this audio skit! Although I wish the ending line would make have SOMETHING to do with the previous "shows" you did a good job nonetheless!
I was arguing with myself with the whole "original characters? Or impressions?' And I came to this conclusion: There's been so many voices over the years. So many different characters brought to life that no matter who I did it would "sound like [insert character name here]" therefore I mostly took a spastic storyline (Changing the channels on a TV) so I could put in that random "..and that's why I'm a millionaire!" part without making it lame or having to complicate a simple premise.
Aaaand that's my reasoning behind it. I'm glad the humor was good, and I am happy the voices were diverse and well done. It was what I intended.
It's pretty catchy!
Except catchy songs tend to stick to the same melody...
I appreciate that you stepped it up and had little interludes into different beats throughout the songs, I just wish the main track (the happy notes) could've been switched up a bit more... especially the bridge.
all in all, I really enjoyed it, it sounds like something I would hear in a collab, or a demo reel of some kind!
Hmm yeah, it's pretty repetitive. Thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
This is what I sent in!
Holy shit that was good! I think I enjoyed this one the most, but parodies aren't too original, even though the execution was so badass!
It would've sounded a lot more "marketable" if you added some sound effects, and music. (Favorite part was the sound of the claws coming out, "SNIGIT! SNIGIT!")
Thanks! I was concerned by the originality factor, but this idea was bubbling in my head for about a month. I still need to learn a little more about adding the music and sound effects properly into my demos. Everything I've done so far hasn't made me happy, so I just cut them. Thanks for the review I am glad you enjoyed! :D
This is what I turned in to FatKidWitAJetPak-
Suggestions: some characters didn't seem too real, and it didn't really have a fluid story!
Compliments: I have a clear image of the whole trailer... and I enjoyed the Lost references, pretty creative too!
-In the thread it sounded like you wanted me to post this here... oh, and I rounded up to a 9 :3 it was a very close competition for me!
Yeah, this is exactly what I wanted, now I know what to improve on. Thanks
HEY! Holy shit!
You cut out the second verse! I liked that part
"and I'll flick, yeah flick, oh flick yo' clit"
Damn that took a while, but finally it's out, now we just need to get that recording shit back and we'll ROCK THE PORTAL!
Alright! You did it for me!
I was going to do this type of thing for the Fat red plumber collab... but since you already did it, could I just use yours? it works for what I need.
I can't wait for this Collab!
Do you mind if I cover this?
I don't know why, but I think the lyrics can go perfectly to a heavy song...
But don't get me wrong, the music does have depth and heart put into it, either way, it's a flawless victory song!
I love it!
I can't not think of George when I hear it.
When are you gonna put the beginning and end songs from 'Lovefisted: The Fistening' on the AP? those are my FAVS!
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